Glorious garment ahead,
Crippled soul enamored,
The soft edges inviting
My fear to touch.
Lungs not ready
To breathe,
Tongue not ready
To savor.
Transcendental thing,
No casual series of threads
Soon to unravel.
Celestial comeliness
Within the hem.
Fruit –
Blue, purple, scarlet,
Priestly ornaments,
Life of the mystery
Revealed to weary eyes,
Tear-stricken eyes.
I would taste what I see,
Fear be damned!
Twelve years…
I come bearing fruit,
Wearing the robe
Of another,
Complexion colored
Of liquid ruby.
The naked, the hungry,
The empty –
Come quickly.
For prompt #103 by the good folks at Read Write Poem .
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I like the mysterious quality in this, and the first person perspective; it makes the religion/legend qualities which are well described, something directly experienced by the reader.
ReplyDeleteThis is indeed mysterious and rich. I can feel the trepidation in "Lungs not ready
ReplyDeleteTo breathe,
Tongue not ready
To savor."
You've captured a very nice experiential quality here. I love the lines:
ReplyDeleteLife of the mystery
Revealed to weary eyes,
Tear-stricken eyes.
and
I come bearing fruit,
Wearing the robe
Of another
Exquisite.
mysteriously good....thanks for sharing this
ReplyDeleteI really like the way this ends. The whole piece has a nice stately progression that gets beautifully upended by the "come quickly" at the end. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteI loved the hesitation that you so vividly expressed "lungs not ready... tongue not ready..." and the anticipation "soon to unravel" and in the end the desire to "come quickly". The progression drives the words and the words are so expressive. Thank you for this lovely poem, Jerry!
ReplyDeleteThis was all so very good, but the last part was a poem unto itself..what a great ending!
ReplyDeleteDelightful read -
ReplyDeleteThe contrast between the first and last stanza is amazing, in the first there are glorious garments but a crippled soul , in the last “I come bearing the fruit/wearing the robe of another “…the hungry, the naked…the appearance is meager but the richness inside is overwhelming. thanks
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